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The contest was part of its Poetry with Prakriti program. You can read all the three winners here.
My poem is pasted below:
"Innuendo in the Cinema Theatre"
For Robert Hass
This a story of two opponents
who face each other, count
silence with just an ‘ahem’.
One guesses very well
something hanky panky
went on indoors, curtained;
while the sheepish other
is embarrassed but sure that
his mate of henna beard
has cheated behind his back.
They believe, she can see,
love and kingdom is a game.
The trot of the horses and
the thundering canons are
only a few of the things
that make her chest rise
higher than the hillside on
the tremulous silver screen.
With this scene where
Satyajit Ray’s chess player
is caught unbuttoned
after returning back to
the game from a quick
love tiff with his silly wife,
the girl knows there will
never be such parables
for her even in the twilight.
In the story, trumpets play
in technicolour hands
hundred horns hoot away.
The magnificent blare
ascertains someone has
cheated and yet, has won.
Men and parodied mules,
women fleeing with babies,
roll like a carriage song.
It remains unclear who
will blink first to disentangle
overtures with their hands.
The script is in a language
she speaks but is remote
for an innuendo in her heart.
Elephants in gold brocades,
climactic chatter, tingly rosewater,
turn her lips butterfly wings
because she will see them
again and again on a screen
of her unbridled dreams.
Lastly, the soldiers march
in and the players stare:
two split fish stranded
unable to remember any
moments of lovemaking
or cheating on a pawn.
They half-rise, she waits.
Her lover leaves through
a door he takes with him:
like shadows mingling dark,
countries drawn in lines,
the two separate.
I wrote to Robert Hass in utmost excitement through his poet wife Brenda Hillman and this is what he wrote back after seeing my poem (my dedication refers to Hass' poem "Heroic Simile"):
"Thanks for your dedication and congratulations on your prize. Your
poem is very poignant to me. It gets at something about the way movies
place the world before (us) as a source of meditation, at the same time that
we are helpless before the way its images enter us. Good luck with
your future work.Robert Hass"
That's a good opening to 2010 I guess, since his reply came on Jan 4. And know what, Trillium Magazine, where I had submitted nearly a year ago, suddenly sent me a mail saying they'd accept all the poems I had submitted. Now more on that later.
Image from the Internet: film poster of Shatranj ke Khiladi (The Chess Players) by Satyajit Ray
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Tim Buck-- This is a perfect distribution of words, of syllabic meter across lines and from one line to the next. Your brain must have been cookin' with clean, pure olive oil to produce such clarity of theme and its presentation.
Nabina Das --Thank you Tim...! this critique of yours tells me a lot, I'd like to carry out some exercises along this note.Very helpful! and yep, of late I've been eating lotsa olives too!!
--William B. Burkholder nice nabina i enjoyed reading this
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--Nabina Das thanks Will, appreciate a lot!
--William B. Burkholder really enjoyed reading this
-- · Kris Saknussemm Nice.
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--Jayashree Kapahi So much depth in such few lines....
--Nabina Das thanks Kris!
Jayashree, appreciate your comment a lot... the poem is actually a bit longer if you follow the link. I just pasted the 1st portion in my note :)
--Jayashree Kapahi Nabina-just read the complete poem.You've distilled the essence of the movie brilliantly.
--Christina Brooks I like this Nabina... was this written originally in English? I love the way it is just a taste of something... very nice.
Thanks for tagging me..
--Megan Collins Oh wonderful Nabina! Agree with Tim - You were cookin' with gas!
--Nabina Das oh Jayashree, thanks so much! The movie is phenomenal and I am always moved by the layers it posed... about the story of 2 friends, about a nation changing, abt personal relationships... :D. Endless possibilities!
Chris, thanks! it was originally written in English... I dedicated it to Robert Hass' "Heroic Simile". The link's on my blog, but you can read it here: http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/16228
--Nabina Das Meg, you bet! and swimmin' in olive jelly! Thanks so much sweetie!
--Megan Collins Oooh Olive jelly! NICE peppercorn!
--Connie Stadler Excellent write, Nabina. I can see why this was highly praised even without seeing the film.
==Priti Aisola Beautiful clarity of images and so much compressed skilfully within the slender frame of this piece. Wonderful, Nabina!
==Nabina Das Connie, so good to have that fantastic response from you!... I'm glad to ride over the cultural-social boundaries :)
Peppercorn says hugs, Meg!
--Abha Iyengar Went to your blog and read the complete poem. I have always loved this movie, and thanks very much for your poem, it brought the film alive for me again. Congrats on winning.
--Abhinav Maurya +1; Loved it!
--Chaman Lal nice Nabina
==Bhagya Somashekar Like I said before I loved reading this poem!
"something hanky panky
went on indoors, curtained" *thumbs up*
Must watch the film...and thanks! :)
--Nabina Das Abha -- I'm thrilled you liked it!
Abhi -- good to have your word!
Chamanji -- thank you!
Bhagya -- The first place winner's words make my day. Loved your poem too. Lyrical, evocative and so beautifully sad too somewhere. I have the Prakriti page on my blog, for everyone to read the winning poems...
why does FB have a tag limit of 25? Makes no sense.
Huge thanks to Kajal, Shelley, Santana - I value your thumbs a lot :)
--Lawrence-Minh Bùi Davis thanks for the tag, enjoyed reading
--Nabina Das Thanks Priti! Means a lot to me...
Lawrence-Minh -- great to have you with me, thanks!
--Nabina Das Cheryl, Dianne, love those "likes"!
--Koyamparambath Satchidanandan Captures the whole scene and psyche tersely..
--Bina Gupta nabs: read yr poem in whole
and the movie came alive once more
congrats!
--Ellpee Mahawar Congrats!!!
--Anuradha Vijayakrishnan Once again, excellent.
--Nabina Das Many thanks Tiku, Minal and Yuyu!
--dear Satchida, the more I think, "psyche" is such a pertinent word you have used...! the movie is all about the colonial history, about lives changing in that context and how we find affinity to that with our present day politics and societal ties ... I am honored to have your comment!
--Binaji, you are a darling, thanks!
-- Ellpee, thanks for reading!
-- Annu, cherish your words, from a fine poet as yourself :)
beautiful poem and wonderful that you dedicated it to Haas and he wrote to you about his feelings about it.
top of the morning to you
Joy, your words bring me so much happiness! Hass' response is special no doubt but I'm happy that you, a special friend to me, appreciated the poem's meaning :) Love!--nabina
i'm new... anticipation to register nearly more oftentimes!
I like it very much!
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